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Another one..

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I'm sitting at home, all alone on a saturday night.
Thinking of all the things that I've could have done right.
Now I know it's to late, But I can't think straight.
You've now poisoned my mind, what can I do?
All I can do is think of you.

Nice one :)
I like it

"All I can do, is think of you." ;)

From: NCDS
"All I can do, is think of you." ;)

Grammar is not needed in poems.

From: N1ke!
All I can do is thinking of you.

Make's no sense.
You mix present and past tense describing the same thing and it doesn't work.

I don't see why you would want to release your work and have it be incorrect.

The poem it self isn't bad though, it's actually my favorite from you so far.

Fixed, now leave it alone ;P

Still not fixed ;)

That last line needs a comma, it should be:

I'm sitting at home,
All alone on a saturday night.
Thinking of all the things,
that I've could have done right.
Now I know it's to late,
But I can't think straight.
You've now poisoned my mind, what can I do?
All I can do,
is think of you.