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What does one do when you cannot go back
Back to the days that were not numbered in black
But rather the days when you felt so happy and alive
Where everyday was not a struggle to survive

So black and blue your emotions are bruised
Your ego now stands crushed and shattered
Laying in piles of dust and ash upon the mighty oak floor
And you seem so tempted to walk right out of the door

As fear of rejection sets forth within your mind
You can remember how you felt whilst emotionally blind
As your days are numbered here within Mother Nature
You cannot bare the sight a zealous Heaven within this so called Hell

As to where you may stand, whether between Heaven or Hell
You should see the might oak band, rings of age and signs of such beauty in life
And when you know that one simple purpose
You will realize as to why your life is not so seemingly worthless



Please leave a comment as to what you think about it and how you might rate it.

i would rate it 1-10 a 10 i liked it a lot

Wow forgot that I posted this. Thanks jmark9911, I am glad at least someone liked it enough to post!

Ohh <3
Deep, and VERY meaningful. I like it A lot. :)
9/10

Thanks Penguin

Wow not to grave dig here or to double post but this is so old. I can't believe I post it on here.

deep meaning but you need to work on your rhyming

I recommend you change bruise to battered!

its deep, but im too lazy to pay real attention : P

I really like emotional poems. They seem to touch me inside. :) Loved it

From: DeiJaiVui
I recommend you change bruise to battered!

that would rhyme better, true.

anyways i ll give 7.5/10
good job.

This was an amazing poem for your first?? 10/10

dont grave dig please.

I would rate it 7/10.