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End this Obsession


Eludis

2006-06-12 01:41:07

End this obsession:

It's always easy to jump to conclusions,
so eager I am, to hold to elusions.

Every promise that arises, can't help but devour it,
it's driven me to ruin, how can you allow it?

Here and now, it's your turn to suffer,
you won't be alone, you'll die with another.

I bleed for a reason.
I bleed for my freedom.
Bleed for a purpose, I no longer need them.

So selfish am I, so ugly, so weak,
I want to destroy one, so very sweet.

Accept this apology, a lack of discretion,
I'll do what I can to end this obsession.

Eludis.

WhiteShadow

2006-06-12 01:43:22

Wah so many words I don't know in there. >.<

Its a good Poem Eludis. Very Poetic

Dark_Sniper

2006-06-12 02:17:41

someone who knows there vocab

Eludis

2006-06-12 02:42:48

Hehehe, thanks for the feedback guys, much appreciated…Still kinda new around here, just trying to build up some respect with members :). If anyone else has feedback, positive or negative, please, don't hesitate to fill me in. Thanks again.

Bebe

2006-06-12 02:51:48

Nice poem….. and nice sig :D

Eludis

2006-06-12 03:11:58

Heh, thanks Bebe. Someone should make a Poem cup :P that would be pure pwnage.

XxKanexX

2006-06-13 03:04:23

What'd you want me to do in the PM you sent me?.. Vs you or something?

And White, if you don't know what them words mean you really need to go back to first grade.

Eludis

2006-06-13 03:18:43

Lol, nah, just wanted some feedback, so many people say good stuff about you on these forums.

XxKanexX

2006-06-13 03:22:20

Oh, It's good. The words go well with each other and it flows nicely. :) Gj.

QQu

2006-06-13 03:48:14

Nice poem Eludis, you make me want to write some poems =P